tighten, sharpen intro graf

This is the version I produced for joining-sipb.tex last fall.

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 # MIT Student Information Processing Board
 
-The Student Information Processing Board (SIPB, pronounced sip-bee) is MIT's volunteer student group dedicated to computing. SIPB has, in one form or another, been working on improving computing at MIT since 1969. Today, SIPB contributes to MIT computing by sponsoring interesting projects that provide additional services or expertise to the MIT community. We have an office just outside the Athena cluster in the MIT Student Center, and you are welcome to come to the office to ask us for help or to hang around and use our computers.
+We are MIT's volunteer student computing group, improving computing at
+MIT since 1969.  Today, SIPB projects provide innovative services and
+special expertise to the MIT community.  We have an office just
+outside the Athena cluster in the student center W20, and you are
+welcome to come by to ask us for help or to hang around and use our
+computers.
 
 This site is a wiki.  Edit, be bold, start with the [[sandbox]] to play around.
 

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 # Joining SIPB
 
-We are MIT's volunteer student computing group, improving computing at
-MIT since 1969.  Today, SIPB projects provide innovative services and
-special expertise to the MIT community.  We have an office just
-outside the Athena cluster in the student center W20, and you are
-welcome to come by to ask us for help or to hang around and use our
-computers.
-
 ## Membership
 
 If you are interested in contributing to SIPB's computing services and